Sunday, February 23, 2020

Week 7 Story: Raiding at Night

Backstory
There once was a young man named Jake. Jake had been at odds with the young prince named Sadik who ruled his lands ever since he learned that Sadik ordered the execution of Jakes Family. The reason for this execution as because the young prince’s father was having affair with Jakes mother.  Jakes mom used to be a healer for the kingdom and one day, after treating the king for back pain for over a year they kissed.  One might ask, “What led to this kiss?” well you see, the King and his wife had not been happy in their marriage for some time and the Julia, Jakes mother, provided companionship and happiness he had never known with his current wife. As the two saw each other in secret, one day, their relationship was discovered by the Kings wife.  Unable to take the heartbreak that she had suffered, she wrote a note to her son telling him everything and then proceeded to jump form the highest point in the tower into the moat.  As Sidak grew up he harbored a dark plan to get his revenge for his mothers’ death.  One day when he was 17 he led a small contingent of his most faithful soldiers into Jake’s town and proceeded to slaughter everyone.  Jake was out tending to crop when he heard his mother scream out. He raced back towards the house and as he peered through the window he saw Sidak sticking as word through his moms’ heart.
Sidak said, “All the pain you caused me, You were the reason my mother took her life, so now I take yours!” As Sidak and his men left the house Jake jumped through the window and cradled his mom vowing for revenge no matter what the cost.

Later
A few years later Jake kept hearing about all the awful things Sadik had done to other families in the area that Jake lived he decided enough was enough.  He decided that on the night of the 13th he would sneak into the castle and murder Sidak so that he could harm no one else.  As night came, Jake made an appeal to the God of Safety, Paul, asking him to protect him long enough to get revenge for the death of his family.  As night came Jake crept slowly through the cover of the brush towards to castle.  He noticed right away that there were not hardly any guards on patrol so he hoped that it would be an easy in and out job.  As Jake came upon the main gate he realized that it was locked and as he scanned the outer wall he saw that he would have to climb up the sides of the tower to reach Sidak’s room. Jake held his breath and began his climb to Sidaks’ room.  A couple of times while making the climb he slipped and it seemed like all hope would be lost, but somehow he regained his grip and footing and continued to climb. Eventually, he reached Sidaks window, and he softly opened it as to make no noise.  Soon he came to the bedroom where Sidak lay sleeping.
 Sidak sensed something was up and suddenly woke up alert as Jake lunged at him screaming, “This is for my mother!”
As Jake was trying to strangle Sidak, Sidak pulled out a knife from under his pillow and proceeded to stab Jake in the stomach.  Crumpling to the ground, Jake could barley stand, but he suddenly felt the power of Paul surge them him and he made one last lunge at Sidak. As the grappled Jake was able to grab the knife and plunge in into Sidak’s throat. As both fell to the floor Jake knew he was dying but he felt at ease knowing he had avenged his mom.  Sidak on the other hand was in tears and blood was pouring out of his mouth and neck wound.  As morning came the neighboring cities surrounding the kingdom had heard about what had happened.  Jake was proclaimed a martyr for the oppressed. All around there were uprisings using Jake as their hero, when the people went to war with unjust forces.


V for Vendetta. (March 4, 2015)
WolvesOfTheTwilight. Source: Wikicommons



Authors Note: For this story I wanted to just have two characters to focus on.  I wanted there to be a good and evil character.  In the original story we are given two characters who are after revenge and it does not end well for either of them.  With this story I wanted Jake to know the cost of getting revenge and even though he does die, the oppressed people in surrounding kingdoms know what he has down and they too rise up and fight back.  The moral of the story is that evil will never win.  I wanted to give a God a little part because this story was really only about vengeance.  In the end vengeance can consume you and will most likely lead to your death. Often when vengeance is talked about, there are always negative repercussions.  Sure, this is true in this story but it also shows that vengeance can signal that people who are being opposed can change that and take back their life.

Bibliography: Gibbs, Laura. The Night Raid. The Night Raid

3 comments:

  1. Hi Andrew,
    I enjoyed this story very much. I like how you only developed two characters. It was enough to develop a plot and teach your lesson, but not super complex. This allows the reader to focus more on what you are trying to teach them. I agree that evil will always win with vengeance unless something else interferes and brings peace to both sides of a conflict.

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  2. Hi Andrew!

    It was great reading you story. First, the way you told the story is very explicit making it easy to understand. I also liked the way you presented the good and evil. The set up was simple and worked well to portray to the parts. I also appreciated the violent details of the fight. I haven’t read a story that’s violent from this class. I can’t wait to read more of your stories!

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  3. Hi Andrew! Oh my gosh I loved your story! The more of it I read, the more I got consumed in the story telling. You're writing is great and the plot is also very well developed. I think your author's note explained everything perfectly too. I was able to see your vision in your story telling and I think it's smart that you showed vengeance isn't always happy in the end, it has it's consequences too. Great story I am looking forward to more of your writing.

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