Sunday, February 2, 2020

Comment Wall

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Creepy child. (NA)
Author: Na. Source: Needpix

Here is a link to my storybook


  1. Andrew,

    I loved your take on the stories from the Ramayana. This was certainly something I have not seen before, and the horror theme provides a refreshing read compared to everything else we've covered thus far. I also enjoyed how you put them in a more modern setting. This is something I've seen a lot of people do and it has seemed to work quite well thus far. At the minimum it makes it much more easy to relate to, which can be difficult given the topics covered in the Ramayana. One thing I noticed is that you say you're setting the scene for three tales of horror, but it looks like there are only two. I may be missing something or maybe you just forgot to post it, just thought I would point that out. Regardless, I enjoyed your use of symbolism and dialogue, and it was a very interesting read.

    I look forward to reading the complete stories!

  2. Andrew, seeing you do horror stories immediately got my attention. Horror movies and stories have always been a favorite of mine, so I'll for sure be keeping up with your stories. I like the turn in a different direction that this takes from most of the other storybooks I've seen. Imagining rakshasas in the modern world is scary on it's own, then adding the bloody details is the cherry on top. Do you plan to keep the whole storybook following this main character? This sort of makes me think of a rakshasa fighting John Wick. The little details about what the symbols mean and which rakshasas they represent are a great way to go into more detail than other stories. Your introduction works well to set the stage, and I'm hoping you're able to go into a little more detail in the battles and scenes that you write in the future!

  3. Hi Andrew!
    I am so excited to read your storybook! I love murder mysteries and horror movies, but I never would have thought to do a theme like this for my storybook. The way you painted the picture in “The Summoning” was really remarkable. The attention to detail along with the dialogue really drew me into the story and the situation at hand. The fact that you included these demons and their symbols is really cool, and a great addition of the epics to your modern twist on the story. “The Journey Home” was a good way to wrap up the introduction. It provided the detail that the audience needed as to why his parents were so brutally murdered in the first place. The gift of the glasses that allows Mehul to see demons that other people are not able to see reminds me of an old 80’s movie “They Live”. If you haven’t seen it, check it out! It may give you more ideas for your stories involving the glasses. 😊

  4. Hi Andrew!
    Your story seems very interesting to me because I am a horror fanatic! I am interested in seeing what you are able to some up with for the rest of your story book. I do have a suggestion for the overall look of this project with the pictures you have chosen to put on. While I love them I just with I was able to see them! When you are on the intro page and the home page I felt myself trying to scroll up to see the tops of the pictures however, it was not there. I think this is an easy fix and would help your project look nicer to the viewers! Your intro really encaptured me and makes me want to get all the spokes from the horror stories you have to tell for us! Overall, I can not wait to see what you are able to create in your future writings!

  5. Andrew,
    All I can say is just WOW! Literally, you had me hooked on your story from beginning to end! I love that you incorporated such a spooky theme throughout your introduction, especially the part that you put, "three Tantric symbols painted in blood on the walls of the living room" and then you go on to describe each of the symbols and what they mean. A slight change that I might suggest is making your header/banner picture to where we are able to see the head and face of the creature! It is a simple fix and I think that it will allow any of the readers to be able to get a good idea.Further, I think that you should bring the image that you have at the bottom of the page and maybe place it in a place that the reader is able to look at, while reading your story. Altogether, good job!